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Reviews for From Russia, With Love...Part 2

By : Number9Dream
  • From PandorasFury on April 04, 2013
    I like this story, but I've got a few issues.

    1. I find your female character to be a pathetic, simpering sheep who despite her taking on the responsibility of raising a child on her own in the third installment and finally leaving her husband behind has the maturity level of a 16 year old with terrible self esteem. There's most definitely character development, which is nice, and her character seems to be multi dimensional she blatantly ignores the warning of her friend, who seems to have good judgment, to leave until after her life and the life of her child (those beatings are severe and potentially fatal considering the size difference) are in very apparent danger.

    2. You present this character as the ultimate victim, and while abuse is definitely never right, Vladimir has some pretty legit reasons to be angry with her:
    a) She never gave him a chance at all, and her reasoning was completely immature. Though this behavior may have eventually manifested he seemed to have relatively pure intentions upon first approaching her about dating.
    b) She led him on throughout their friendship and in the beginning played it off like she had no idea he was interested, thus continuing this immature and frankly cruel behavior because she enjoyed the attention and the feeling of being pursued. Then she proceeded to approach him after he tried to distance himself from her (which is logical) and begged for him to come back. It appeared not that she wanted his friendship (due to the shedding of tears, even crying herself to sleep), but that she was more upset over losing the source of constant admiration and validation.
    c) She complained constantly that she didn't want him there but never once took any measure to eject him besides half-assedly pleading with him to leave while her subtext always indicated that she was interested.
    d) Renae invited her friend over to watch how he behaved not because she was genuinely interested in advice but because she wanted someone to confirm for her what she was already feeling and in order to make things seem more legit to her friend lied to him in a brutal way in the process. Honestly I'm surprised he stuck around for that.
    e) What was with the club shenanigans? You didn't need to throw that in. This girl is constantly being raped and after she cheated on him (she actually called him her boyfriend while starting to hook up with the sleaze at the club) and got herself raped AGAIN by someone else, potentially contracting a disease in the process, discovered (or admitted) how she really felt about Vladimir? And he just lays back and agrees to stay?
    f) She trusted him so little that she refused to tell him about her pregnancy until after she absolutely HAD to, basically using it as leverage in order to get him to stop hurting her. Also, who the hell is stupid enough to believe firmly that sex while pregnant could harm the baby, but not research it?

    3. Despite what some other girls said while reviewing the first installment of this story, Vladimir appears not as a sexy and masculine wizard in bed who swept Renae off her feet but as a sneaky, manipulative and creepy fuck who justifies his actions by pretending he knows better than the woman he claims to admire. He infantilizes the hell out of her but holds her up as a symbol of feminine strength. The fact that he believes that with the right amount of manipulation he can completely change her view (despite the fact that she fell for it) would drive any mature and wise woman off. He deliberately picks out a sheltered, insecure adolescent minded GIRL barely into adulthood in order to satisfy his need to control somebody. His WWE character did not have that much depth, and while you captured the essence of brutal monster well you gave him more credit in the intelligence area than I think he was due. I do understand poetic license in writing fanfiction however =)

    4. Your apparently strong, masculine man commits suicide after multiple unsuccessful attempts to repair his marriage and change his behavior because a girl broke a promise to him to reevaluate and instead decides to date again while still married to him, and serve him with divorce papers and 6 months of therapy and a successful recovery from alcoholism which did specifically to be with her and to help raise his son. If he were a real man he would've given up and you could've added a 4th installment in which he finds someone else and changes his ways. Instead he crumbles and gives up. You presented the suicide well though and did make him out to be weak in the end.

    I do know this is a self insertion and I'm particularly interested in what made you present yourself this way.
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