Reviews for One Hot Night With Hart & FireBy : Heyoo |
Thanks for the shout out, and the review, much appreciated. I'm really glad you chose to post this instead of deleting it, as that would have been tragic waste, as this was tons of fun.
Obviously I enjoyed the FF more, but I also enjoy reading MF, so I'm always up for a bit of MFF fun, and I think you made good use of some of the combinations you can get with that. Obviously you could have done more, but hopefully that leaves you room for the sequel, which I really hope you get around to, as I'm a big fan of Paige.
Becky Lynch has had a funny career, hasn't she? There were moments on NXT, and when she first won the Women's Smackdown title, the company finally felt they were getting behind her, and I'd argue she could have been seen as a top during those brief times, but yeah, then she went right back to jobbing for everyone, which is definitely bottom material. If the last few years of the WWE's so-called main roster hadn't done an excellent job of crushing my enthusiasm for wrestling I would have probably already done a story where after years of bottoming Becky finally finds the confidence to be a top. Then again the more I see of her now the more I want to see her get her arse fucked, so these two fics have really hit the spot.
I do think you've rushed through a few of the sex acts. Like, maybe focused more on what each character was thinking, and stretch them out a bit more? Just a bit of constructive criticism for you. Because don't get me wrong, I love your work, especially the dirty talk, and of course the lesbian strap-on anal. Exactly my kind of thing, and I hope you keep at it, because I'd really like someone else to be doing it.
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