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Reviews for While in Toronto

By : DuchessAvari
  • From Katone on August 02, 2005
    Love you, Isa! Hope all goes well with you know what audition! Miss you too much! Hopefully I'll get to fly up for TIFF, so save me a Gala tic! Meanwhile, keep sending me ideas!
    Love you and your "stories."
    Kat
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  • From ANON - anonymous on May 24, 2005
    Is this a Mary Sue? It sure sounds like one.
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  • From ANON - sky on May 15, 2005
    Dude you gotta continue this!!!!!!!!It was fuckin awesome!!
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  • From ANON - Mila on May 12, 2005
    awesome!!Please please update soon!!
    ps: e-mail m ewhen you update plz!
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  • From ANON - Nefretiri on April 17, 2005
    You should do more.....maybe from Hayden's POV?
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  • From ANON - anonymous on October 12, 2004
    This suspiciously sounds like a Mary Sue wannabe. Your female lead seems to have an enourmous ego and borders on being too slutty. In one part it sounds like she's trying to make sure he stays drunk enough so she can have sex with a star! Just because she's a female doesn't make getting the partner drunk for sex is any less kosher. Also, you need to double check your spelling because there are too many spelling mistakes. Toning down the girl's tendency to drool about herself and making her more believable could help your story immensely.
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  • From ButtonsXRasin on October 09, 2004
    Sexeh.
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