Reviews for HLA: Hot Lesbian AnalBy : MTL |
Review: Chapter 5.
I wonder if this'll be continued beyond 5 chapters, but if so, I can imagine Victoria bringing Trish to her new home, Victoria's home, to serve her as her personal "unpaid maid"; but in quite literally all ways.
It is clear to me that Victoria in this loves Trish's body- she seems afraid of damaging it, and I did enjoy the part about Victoria nursing on Trish, as well as it seems she was "playing" with Trish Stratus' body- I wonder if she'll compel her to "marry" her, perhaps just to hide the full degree of their relationship, as in literal slavery in the most intimate type of slavery, which is what this clearly is that's going on between those two very physically beautiful women in this story.
I could see it continuing in all sorts of ways, but whether or not it does is entirely up to you, Sir... I just hope it does. Perhaps post Trish moving in with her "mistress-wife" Victoria, it'd include Victoria ordering Trish to kiss her "down there" and at that time sitting on Trish's collarbones and upper chest while they're in their 'marital bed'- that's just one way this could go.
Perhaps Victoria would order Trish to marry her is because she would enjoy having her as her "submissive wife"- gay women, based on what I've managed to gather from talks with them, tend to like romance far more than mere sex, and clearly here from the "Victoria vs. Trish chapter" of this story you clearly have Victoria all but admitting to being a gay woman from the ways she's been "eyeing" Trish and what she wants to do to/with her, so it's likely that in this case she'd force her slave to marry her- also to avoid emotionally tearing her heart apart with her emotional ties that are inevitable with regard to sexual contact- another reason it'd be likely that she'd prefer to keep Trish all to herself; why not in her case cement that situation with "wedlock"?
That'd be my guess of her views, mind you, MTL, and all I can do is encourage you to produce more, but I sincerely hope you do- as messed up as their conduct was, it was fun to read, partly because of the messed up situation and the (one of my personal favorites) mutual verbal abuse going on between them, but also because of Victoria's tactics in when to run and when to move in for the kill (or, as she might here; the kiss!).
Extrememly kooky behavior going on in this, but fun story nonetheless, Sir!
Sincerely one of your fans;
Krulos.
P.S. I'm very pleased with this chapter, and I hope for some "domestic scenes" between these two, and yes, I'll wait if needed, so long as I get good quality products in the end of my wait- these suggestions are offerings to get the gears going, I really want to see what'll come of these, if anything; if nothing... that's the way it goes. I'll still remain your fan, though, just a bit disappointed- and that's the way life goes, as the saying is hinted at paraphrasing., as it were.
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