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Reviews for FALLEN

By : DieselsKitty
  • From ANON - Fluid Degree on October 14, 2005
    You made me cry!!! Great story I love the poetry
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  • From angexaime on August 14, 2005
    Dear shivingdeep,
    "Anon" was 100% correct. As far as grammer goes, it doesn't show that you're very good with it either. So, maybe you should just let her decide herself. The grammer isn't BAD but it isn't good. It's okay.

    Aside from that, it wasn't TO bad. Could have been better.
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  • From ANON - Krystal on October 17, 2004
    Girl I only got this far for reading. Awesome job! I will read more later. You keep up the good work and don't let anyone diss ya!
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  • From ANON - Diesel\'s Kitty on March 31, 2004
    Thanks for the feedback!! I hope you will be as pleased with Fallen 2 as you are with this one.


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  • From ANON - Lady-k on March 16, 2004
    this is one of the best stories i evr read. it was awesome. i love te fact that you write it in the first person point of view.
    it makes me feels like i'm the one telling the story. i thank you for it. you did a very good job in writng it. again good job.
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  • From ANON - shivingdeep on January 02, 2004
    Dear Annon, this story is off da hook. Thanks for giving my girl here some grammar suggestions, and i'm sure that she appreciates them. On the otherhand, babygirl has 356 freakin hits, so OBVIOUSLY people are reading it and eating it up.
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  • From ANON - Anon. on December 08, 2003
    Don't think I'm being harsh b/c I didn't like the story. I don't think the story was that bad, it could be better if you made some changes. The tense was the biggest problem I had. I didn't finish reading the story b/c I honestly got sick and tired of deciphering the tenses. You switch verb tenses way too much. Sometimes you have to stick with one and never falter. I think the story will be so much better if you would just stick with one tense. The easiest tense is past. Also, if you were to be more descriptive and not so fast pace I think the story will be better. You also have to watch your time reference. You easily switch back to six months and so forth and the readers are left confused. Work on these things and I think the story will be better.
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