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Reviews for You STILL Can't Control Destiny

By : pensfan100
  • From JBLOVER on July 09, 2005
    That was amazing. Chapter 5 was so good. Please post A.S.A.P.
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  • From ANON - cassimus on July 05, 2005
    That was very hot, I quite enjoyed it. I especially liked the last line, because, well he is Superman :).
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  • From ANON - pensfan100 on July 03, 2005
    Gee, Eridani! Thanks for the indepth feedback. I'm glad you like the stories and you are right about a couple things. They are definitely not like each other and I didn't mean them to be. In the case of YSCCD, they trust each other with their inner selves and so are more inclined to explore the physical side of their relationship. And, yes, Hayden has gotten more aggressive in the stories since YCCD. However, I am working on one where he is not quite that aggressive. I didn't think he was real aggressive in Mine To Give, either. But, I get called on the carpet at times for making him too nice! When I get around to writing this next chapter, Natalie is going to pull his plug a bit in a way he doesn't expect. Their wedding is a week away and I just can't have him act like he's been acting. The spiritual and emotional side of their relationship will be more on display. I do, however, hope to keep humor going in places. Maybe Natalie will find out that his brother and sister know about the table! ;-) pensfan
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  • From ANON - eridani on July 03, 2005
    Okay, I'm sorry, I'm going to cheat and review both You Can't Control Destiny and its sequel here. I'm being lazy.
    I loved You Can't Control Destiny! I thought it was just fantastic. I can't pass any judgement as to whether your characters were "in character", but whether true to the real thing or not, they were very believable and easy to empathise with. Plenty of supporting plot too- decent character development to balance out the adult themes, so that the story had substance.
    The sequel, however I appreciate on an entirely different set of values. So far we haven't seen much to reveal anything new about the characters, but there is a lot of toe curling writing. In that sense, I think perhaps you don't need to worry so much about connecting it to the original story- in fact, I think this migth even work better removed from You Can't Control Destiny because really, it feels like the goals of the stories are very different.
    Perhaps I am stepping over the line of what is acceptable commentary on a story, but I'm going to go for it anyway- I read through all of your stories, and noticed that your depiction of Hayden has followed a pretty steady development. He seems to get more dominant in each new story. I'm not going to attempt to psychoanalyse you over it- but I thought that it was interesting that your 'sweet, nice-guy' character seemed to deteroirate considerably with each new work. Take, for example, the Hayden from 'The War'- he is almost diametrically oppposed to the depiction offered up in 'You Can't Control Destiny'. Not so different from the Hayden described in 'You STILL Can't Control Destiny', though.
    Speaking of which, the latest chapter of YSTILLCCD had me in stitches. The humour was a nice change of pace. Great work.
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  • From ANON - Stag on July 02, 2005
    Superman, damn, that's hot.
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  • From ANON - Caz on July 01, 2005
    LOLOL! I can't believe that this just gets better and better. Loved the ending to 5. Hilarious, and brilliant. More soon of ANY story please, Bonnie
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  • From ANON - michelle on July 01, 2005
    i love this story. especially Hayden. His so sexy! and wicked!
    Poor natalie.*evil smile* update soon if u can.
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  • From ANON - christine on July 01, 2005
    another great chapter!! thank you for updating!!!

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  • From ANON - christine on June 27, 2005
    thanks so much for updating!! i love all ur stories!!
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  • From ANON - Rain on June 26, 2005
    Holy Smoly! That was effing hot.

    Is that then end of this story are do you have more torment in store.
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  • From ANON - immo on June 26, 2005
    I love your story...well,actually I love all of your stories but anyway...I hope you're going to update soon.I can't wait to see what's up next.I'm not really interested into the sexual situations,them to of course, but I really like your plot so...keep up the good work
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 25, 2005
    oooooooh, raunchy!!!
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  • From ANON - Caz on June 25, 2005
    My God, Bonnie, what can I say, but bloody WOW! Yeah, I think that one word will do. WOW!
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  • From ANON - universal on June 21, 2005
    Arrgh! The most evil cliffhanger ever! WHAT is on that paper? This is brilliant - please, please update soon!
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  • From ANON - christine on June 21, 2005
    please update!! please please PLEASE!!! i simply cannot wait!!

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