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Reviews for She Was the only One

By : RyanneDeath
  • From SamTheMan on February 26, 2009
    Ridiculous, unrealistic, fluffy, very Mary-Sue. I managed to read every chapter, but only because it was so unintentionally funny, and I'm one who always appreciates some good comedy!

    I'm going to be blunt. This may sound more like a flame than anything constructive, but you are a horrible "author" and I don't think concrit will ever help you. So, I ask myself, why bother? Yes, I've read your other shit. Yes, I know what I'm talking about. So let's get to the basics.

    1. You are a horrible writer. Already established that, but I wish to elaborate. Seriously, you cannot write. Your spelling is horrible, your formatting is hard on the eyes, your grammar would shame a kindergartner, and for the love of FUCK woman, have you ever opened a thesaurus? Your writing is repetitive and embarrassing to any respectable person who managed to pass the 2nd fucking grade.

    2. It's okay to have fantasies. I have many of my own. The difference between you and me? I don't fucking turn my personal, private fantasies into fanfiction and then post it on a public website. Nobody, except your run-of-the-mill teenage girl, is interested in reading someone else's masturbation material. Are you a teenage girl? I seriously fucking hope you are (because at least then, your non-existent writing ability would be excusable), but I doubt it. I think I remember you from the 'Phant. Weren't you that self-righteous little cunt who hated Dita and fucking *stalked* Manson and Twiggy?

    3. Your characters are horrible. Kira or whatever the fuck you called her, was your typical 2-dimensional Mary-Sue. She was described as being "gorgeous" and "unique" and a strong, independent woman who makes all tEh OMG hawt rawkstarrs swooonnn!!!11eleven Not a believable or likeable character at all. Then again, you were probably molding her personality from your own, and if you are indeed the Ryanne from the 'Phant, that would be understandable. Oh, and by the way, you actually made me *hate* Twiggy. You turned him into a fucking PANSY with no fucking mind of his own. If the real Twiggster read this piece of shit, he would laugh in your face and tell you not to kid yourself. And why do you always make Manson the villain in all your fics? Pissed 'cause your know deep down he wouldn't fuck your crazy, stalker-ish ass?

    4. Your plot was dreadful and unbelievable. And let me give you a reality check: THE REAL TWIGGY WOULD NOT BE A FAITHFUL LITTLE LAPDOG! Especially in those days. He would fuck and fuck and fuck and poor little Kira would be left at home with a seething case o' herpes and 12 fucking kids.

    With all of that said, take your piece of shit Mary-Sue dirty brown skidmark and SHOVE IT UP YOUR LOOSE AND STINKING ASS.
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  • From ANON - QoS on November 24, 2006
    Nice, I liked the ups and downs of the story, even the fluffy end. One of my more liked stories by you. Although I don't tend to read straight ff, or do i tend to like it or write it. But still good job.
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  • From ANON - Sam on September 30, 2006
    This was good, except the whole baby thing kind of ruined it for me, and it was really rushed. But still, good story.
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  • From ANON - Anon on September 08, 2006
    ha ah i know mason an ass in this story but i love him anyway go kira taking care of twigz hes so dam cute!
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  • From ANON - Anon on September 07, 2006
    omg manson you prick!!!!

    more please more
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  • From ANON - Anon on September 05, 2006
    Y HALO THAR FROM MMDN
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    Y HALO THAR FROM MMDN
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    Y HALO THAR FROM MMDN
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    Y HALO THAR FROM MMDN
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    Y HALO THAR FROM MMDN
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    Y HALO THAR FROM MMDN
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    Y HALO THAR FROM MMDN
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  • From ANON - HAY on September 05, 2006
    Y HALO THAR FROM MMDN
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    Y HALO THAR FROM MMDN
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  • From ANON - HAY on September 05, 2006
    Y HALO THAR FROM MMDN
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