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Reviews for Forbidden Kiss

By : DBSKAngel
  • From rachelmary on July 27, 2007
    u should make a sequal to this story ^^
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  • From Kashshaptu on May 21, 2007
    Wow.

    Just wow.

    Do you know nothing about Gackt OR Hyde?

    To start, you used a quote at the beginning that you said was a 'True event look in youtube.com...'

    Hate to burst your bubble or whatever, but that was a joke. It was subbed by a Gakuhai fan who was kidding around and making fun of Gackt's wild expressions and motions during that interview.

    Second, although I understand that it's nearly impossible for you to actually think on your own, you just copied the episode of Domoto Tsuyoshi's show that Gackt appeared on for that one part... maybe you should try to be original?

    You spelled karaoke 'keryokey' once and then you spelled it again as 'kerokei', which tells me that you honestly don't know how to spell it. It's called a dictionary--'karaoke' is an actual English word now, so you have no excuse.

    Since when does Hyde ever have a free day that hasn't been scheduled in advance? Also, wouldn't there be a little problem with them having sex in the karaoke bar? Especially since, although they're separate rooms, there are windows in the doors and walls...

    Now, anyway, ignoring the major deus ex machina there, the smut itself was terribly unconvincing. I've read better written by a twelve-year-old.

    I'm not saying your story sucks or anything, I'm saying it needs work. A lot of work. Like originality, a good editor, and a reality check on the two's relationship.

    Better luck next time.
    ~Kyouten
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  • From SingSing on March 09, 2007
    ...

    *pictures all that in her head*

    wow...*fans self* Hyde won't be walking straight for a while!!!
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