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Reviews for The argument

By : Leesa
  • From ANON - Ryan on January 15, 2015
    Hello there, writer. Here is my review of your story.

    For starters, it was good. The sex was up to par, and the plot of the story was okay although it did leave me wondering what this mysterious argument was between the two. I was just waiting for Nikki to have a flash back of that but it never happened which was somewhat disappointing.

    Secondly: I must agree with the other guy who reviewed. Although, you probably have your reasons and I can't judge too harshly. When I wrote my first 5 Crue fictions, I had no knowledge of them. I started out young, after seeing them on T.V and falling into an obsession. I didn't read the books, I didn't pay much attention to them, I was just in love with the looks. Even though I wrote 2 successful fanfictions a year or so back, I still didn't have my knowledge back then and avoided detail to their lifestyle; leaving it just pure sex. However, I have read the books now except Nikki's. I'm working on Tommy's. And with that knowledge, I'm going to point out some things but I only do it to be critical.

    Yes, Nikki's last name is SIXX. But I chuckled at that, because my mother gets that wrong ALL the time and it reminded me of a video Nikki done a couple months back where he went under cover and actually made little jokes about his last name, including saying Stixx instead of Sixx, so although that peeved me, it was funny too. Another thing was, Tommy. Tommy is a sucker for romance. All he ever wanted was to love and be loved. He was the hopeless romantic out of the band so that peeved me too when I read he wasn't either, lol. I could see it with Nikki, back then but Tommy has always been a dreamer when it came to romance.

    There were also some spelling errors and grammar errors but I assume English might not be your native language. Even so, we all have to start somewhere. When I started writing, I was the same way and I was a born and raised American. I just never paid attention in school, haha. I taught myself grammar, spelling and to be better in writing. So it's something to practice and improve like anything.

    Over all, I did enjoy this story.
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  • From ANON - Anon on September 15, 2010
    I think that you should do a little more research next time or proof read. I couldn't finish reading this story because is name is NIKKI SIXX not NIKKI STIXX. Just a thought.
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