Reviews for All Red ReturnsBy : Heyoo
Can you do the story with Eva owning AJ Lee
Liv Morgan or Sasha Banks next
Again loved the dirty talk and everything surrounding the sex. And to be fair, some of the sex acts were fine here, like the spanking. I thought that was a decent length. But then there was the cowgirl, which was only a couple of lines. I would have really liked to hear about how Tori's entire body was aching, especially her gaping butt hole, and it was painful to move, but she did so out of pure adrenaline and need to cum. Then re-stuffing her ass and building up a rhythm. And her thoughts during it. Just little things which would extend the sex, and make your stories perfect IMO. But they're pretty close to perfection anyway IMO, and I really hope you keep it up.
Maybe part of the problem is basically by the end you were just rushing to get it over with? Because I know the feeling, and I definitely relate to not being happy with a story. But just remember, we're easily our own worst critics, and give yourself a break. After all, this is just meant to be a bit of fun, right?
As mentioned I'm a big fan of models topping wrestlers, and I felt this was a great example of why, as the humiliation Toni Storm felt submitting to Eva Marie was soooooo hot! Even though I'm not that familiar with Toni. I mean, I saw NXT Blackpool and was impressed with what I saw from her, and she certainly is hot with a great ass, but for some reason I just can't find the time to watch NXT UK. It's on my to-do list, but I never seem to get around to it. I don't know, maybe I'm just burnt out with wrestling at this point. I've seen way too much of Eva Marie, both on NXT and the main roster, and I would love to see more of her topping wrestlers. Admittedly, between the two would like to see the Alexa story continued more, but you can continue this and make it different from that.
My favourite part of the story was Eva showing Toni that footage on her phone, and you could easily do a couple of chapters of Eva staring at them and flashing back to how she conquered those women. Or she could tell Toni all about it as her new pet kisses her feet. It could even be all from Eva's perspective. I would hate to lose the perspective of her victim, but it would make it different from the Alexa story. Alternatively, to make it really different, you could have chapters of Eva playing with her already broken bitches in turn, may be introducing Toni to them and making them tell the story of how they got here while Eva ass fucks them.
Also, if Eva is returning, does that mean she was the Alpha female, and in her absence some of her former bitches have rediscovered their dominance and need to be broken again? Easy to do with all that blackmail material she has, but that doesn't mean it wouldn't be fun. Especially if she brings along some of her bitches who stayed loyal to help, like AJ, Paige and Emma. Then of course, what about the possibility of Charlotte being the one that got away? Or maybe it was someone were not expecting to be able to survive? Either way, Eva hatches a plan to finally get them, and if it is Charlotte, it can involve the other horsewomen.
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