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September 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Well, someone has to start with the feedback... Short stories are normally not that easy to review, since there very rarely is a storyline or any character development. Same goes for your story, or at least this chapter of it. Angelina Jolie is sexy, but I don't even know who Lauren is. That could be my fault, no doubt. Still, are you going somewhere with this story or is it just a random encounter?