rate_review Reviews

Finally. A chapter! It was very good. Quite an informative-non-smut-fluff-argumentative chapter. It was sweet. I really hope they work things out. Great writing.

Rosh xx

Have loved this story. I want to know what's going to happen but I don't want it to end. I'm confused about one thing though, what's the age of consent in the US? It's 16 in the UK so BJ wouldn't be in any formal trouble although the British papers would give him hell! I know that it's all looking abit of a mess at the moment but give us all a Crimbo pressie and make it a happy ending please!!!!!!

She updates!
*thunder shakes the earth, the skies open, and a choir of angels descend upon the land*

Your talent at suspense baffles me. I don't know how every single chapter can be so fulfilling, yet at the same time make me writhe a little because there isn't more. I love that you didn't make Ava so injured that the whole chapter would have just turned into a big Days of Our Lives hospital sequence because she's teetering on the brink of death or something. It was just enough damage to evoke the right amount of emotion, and uncover the part of Ava's backstory with her mom, which was a great expansion.

Having the press salivating downstairs gave the situation all the right realism. It's right that Billie keeps it all together for his kids, and is the grown up thinking about the press situation instead of falling into Ava's lap and doing a big blubbering make-up speech just because she's hurt. But at the same time, giving her the "we're gonna talk" look before he leaves keeps him from being insensitive and also makes me itch for when that conversation finally happens.

And, sidenote, I'm really surprised by the fact that I'm loving Ava's full name being Aviva ever since Cara said it in whatever chapter that was. I never would have guessed it was short for anything, and that's so pretty!

So anyway. Perfection, my dear, and as always I'm on the edge of my seat for your next chapter.

And don't even worry about it taking a long time. Boy trouble? Certainly says it all. Little batards! Just let me know if you need someone to...y'know..*smacks palm with fist a few times* take someone down a few pegs for you...

XOXO
Kiera

NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO! I DIDN'T SPEND COUNTLESS HOURS ON READING THIS STORY FOR AVA TO GET HURT! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE DON'T MAKE HER DIE. I WILL SERIOUSLY CRY. I JUST READ A STORY WHERE THE TWO MAIN CHARACTORS DIED AND IT MESSED ME UP FOR THE REST OF THE DAY.

You've got to be SHITTING ME! That was like, the worst (And by worst I mean best, because it worked so well!) clifthanger EVER!!!!!!!! You're KILLING me here!!!!!!!!!!

Oh God! I'd love to go on about the technical brilliance, amazing writing and all, because it was there, but my baser urges are more to run around screaming for a few minutes due to the HORRIBLE CLIFFHANGER UNCERTAINTY! You're giving me ulcers with your damn suspense!

*grabs collar* *shakes you* UPDATE! WRITE MORE, BITCH! *runs away*

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*runs back* *hugs your leg*

I didn't mean it, I love you! Update soon though, or you're going to have an angry mob on your doorstep!

God I hate cliffhangers.....:)

Ahhhh! Oh my god. You can't do this to me! I demand more! AKA: Really damn good as always. This chapter was incredibly heart-wrenching. Very emotional *Thumbs up*

you know....word on the street is...cliffies aren't cool. :(

WAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH.

That was so amazingly written. Are you joking? You can NOT let it happen like that. Christ. It would be... It would be against the law! The law of fiction! Whyyy? Where do you come up with this tuff? It's so awe inspiring but I'd end up writing a subconscious exact of The Babysitter if I tried.

Great stuff, I hope you write more or even a sequel if it doesn't end the way I think it will.