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November 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
how can i say this gently...how long have you been writing? your english is terrible. it would be a great story if you worked on the grammar. try to find a beta, have them help you, and then re-post it.
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October 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like where the story is going, but you'll need to polish up your writing style a bit. Spell check would help...