rate_review Reviews

Best Davey and Jade story I have ever read. It was so beautiful.

This has a lot of potential, but you need to be careful with punctuation. Also, "your" is not the same as "you're". "Your" means posession, and "you're" is "you are". The sex scene was good, though a bit cliche. And who's Joel? You never elaborated on that... With a beta, this would be amazing. It is really good, don't get me wrong. But it can get better. Take this as constructive critisism and not an attack. =]