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December 4, 2013 at 12:00 AM
great story!!! loved every bit of it, awesome!
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October 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
post again, soon?
please?!
please?!
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March 28, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I agree with ZipFlopOhMyGod. The story is good, but a little rushed. Even the littlest bit more detail would help out but other then that, the story's good.
Keep up the good work and update soon ;)
Keep up the good work and update soon ;)
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March 27, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hi! I like your plot but I feel like your trying to rush through it. Just reading through the first chapter I couldn't feel the characters. I'm very removed from the situation. Use setting details to bring the readers into the story so they can relate better with the characters. Losing Jimmy was a massive blow to fans and band alike I don't doubt if it had been Matt it would have been any less. You've got a great story idea, you just need to find a way to work the reader in as well.